Thin thin high stature, always be very earnest at ordinary times, very grave, smile always does not see on the face. But when he laughs, always sending out however glamour. He is a mysterious person, having multiple capacity. He perhaps is an amiable or severe father, perhaps be a filial son, at the same time he also is the God that I respect most. But compare with this photograph, he still has a soldier of more glorious title —— China.
瘦瘦高高的个子，平时总是很严肃、很庄重，脸上总是见不到笑容。但当他笑起来的时候，却总是散发着魅力。他是一位神秘人，有着多重身份。他也许是一位慈祥或严厉的父亲，也许是一位孝顺的儿子，同时他也是我最尊敬的偶像。但与此相比，他还有一个更为光荣的称号——中国军人。
Their extraordinary, it is ” of “ an unusually lucky person natively. Their life is not for oneself work, also not be for parents work, it is for our motherland can prosperous, guo Taimin is installed, it is to render service to repay kindness the motherland, it is for a force for motherland him dedication and vivid. This year is 2019, it is us the date that new China establishs 70 years. 70 years ago, new China just held water, power only power is thin, suffer everywhere the person is elbowed out and hit pressure. Come 70 this years wind storm rain, go throughall the vicissitudes of life, join because of what had Chinese soldier just about, china just slowly rise formidably. But change today's China, be by no means easy thing.
他们与众不同，生来就是“天之骄子”。他们的人生从来就不是为自己而活，也不是为父母而活，是为了我们祖国能够繁荣昌盛，国泰民安，是为了报效祖国，是为了为祖国奉献自己的一份力量而活。今年是2019年，是我们新中国成立70周年的日子。70年前，新中国刚成立，势单力薄，处处受人排挤和打压。这70年来风风雨雨，历经沧桑，正是因为有了中国军人的加入，中国才慢慢的强大起来。但换来今天的中国，绝非易事。
In the summer with how many hot broil, they are carrying big sun on the head, calling word of command, streaming with sweat is even straightforward however standing, doing the training of high strenth, it is to do an useful person only, have national person to the motherland, contribute oneself force for the motherland. In how many cold winter, they sleep of the lid still be one bed however thin thin quilt, the sort of chill can freeze the person so that sleep to be not worn to become aware …… has how many person to be in so good age, still be the floret in a conservatory, all the day faineant flower is worn parental money, below the shelter that can lean close in parents only. In the baby that they also are themselves in parental eye, want to be being bestowed favor on, move wanting be used to. But the lifestyle that they abandoned this kind be being enjoyed leisurely, they should use their force to go up too different life. How many day day night, how many kinds are overwhelmed with sorrow, rip a heart to crack lung how many times, animated a child, a grown in conservatory flower, become an adamancy, already OK the person of take charge of a department alone.
在多少个炙热的夏天，他们顶着大太阳，喊着口令，汗流浃背却还要笔直的站立着，做着高强度的训练，只是为了做一个有用的人，对祖国有用的人，为祖国贡献自己的一份力量。在多少个寒冷的冬天，他们睡觉盖的却仍是一床薄薄的被子，那种寒冷能把人冻得睡不着觉……有多少人在这么好的年纪，还是一朵温室里的小花，整天无所事事花着父母的钱，只能依偎在父母的庇护下。在父母眼中他们也是自己的宝贝，要宠着，要惯着。但他们放弃了这种悠闲享受的生活方式，他们要用自己的力量过上不一样的人生。多少个日日夜夜，多少种痛不欲生，多少次撕心裂肺，活生生的把一个孩子，一朵在温室里长大的花朵，变成一个坚强，已经可以独当一面的人。
I love pa Mom you! I love Chinese soldier you! But I love most, it is me most dear motherland mother!
爸妈我爱您！中国军人我爱您！但我最爱的，是我最亲爱的祖国母亲！
Author: Yu Yingying
作者：余莹莹
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导师点评：
Article depict Chinese soldier, depict their pains, depict their hold to, depict they flourish for the country prosperous and strong dedication all determination and perseverance, full text of great momentum. The language of the composition is emphatic, read rise bright able to read aloud fluently, leave deep impression to the reader. Nevertheless, the composition also has small flaw, the key of composition depict and center are Chinese soldier, but in composition ending place China soldier became a foil however, turned to the express to motherland mother love, divide not clear primary and secondary a bit, the respect that the teacher feels composition ending is in a need to convey pair of China soldiers and adore enough, the topic of such compositions will be more specific.
本文描写了中国的军人，描写了他们的辛劳，描写了他们的坚持，描写了他们为国家繁荣富强奉献一切的决心和毅力，全文气势磅礴。作文的语言抑扬顿挫，读起来朗朗上口，给读者留下深刻的印象。不过，作文也有一点小瑕疵，作文描写的重点和中心都是中国军人，但是在作文结尾处中国军人却成了一个陪衬，转向了对祖国母亲爱意的抒发，有点分不清主次，老师觉得作文结尾处只需要表达对中国军人的尊敬与崇拜就够了，这样作文的主题会更加明确。
Directive teacher: Zhang Xueqin
指导老师：章雪琴