Campus is how beautiful, it makes the life better. Early morning, gentle breeze stroke lives the tip of a tree, added variety of one color separation to tree, flower also extends the leaf that gives beauty, show melting smile, a light faint scent attacks continuously nose, attend class every time and finish class to be able to have a paragraph of euphonic music, butterfly follows this moving note to be waved gently rise.
校园是多么美丽，它让生活更美好。清晨，微风拂过树梢，给树木增添了一分色彩，花儿也舒展出美丽的花瓣，露出甜美的微笑，一股淡淡的清香直扑鼻子，每当上课和下课都会有一段悦耳的音乐，蝴蝶跟着这动人的音符轻轻舞动起来。
When I just walked into new campus doorway, see such circumstance, make me be intoxicated unceasingly, until it is good to passed just had answered a god to come a little while, I am taking expectant mood to go to go in campus, on the road, an aroma blow on the face and come, your person is not kept out, this flower is sweet, make me feel pleasurable immediately, excited unceasingly. Continueing to go forth is a few large trees, below lofty tree very shady and cool, can hide below the tree to enjoy the cool secretly in burning hot summer, gentle breeze kiss is worn branch, the leaf is being waved gently, the body with moving waveringly. Subsequently I saw one place fountain, clear spring water still gives out “ the sound of ” .( 作文 WWW.zuoWenBa.neT )
我刚走进新校园门口时，便见到如此情景，令我陶醉不已，直到过了好一会儿才回过神来，我便带着期待的心情往校园里走，路上，一股浓香扑面而来，令人抵挡不了，这股花香，顿时令我感到心情舒畅，兴奋不已。继续往前走是几棵大树，高大的树下十分阴凉，在炎热的夏天里可以偷偷躲在树下乘凉，微风轻拂着树枝，树叶轻轻舞动着，摇摆着动人的身躯。随后我便看到了一处喷泉，清澈的泉水还发出“哗啦哗啦”的声音。
Admired all the way beautiful scenery, see education building eventually, large building of building of its image height is same, stand still in this. A little while I saw stair, I got on 6 buildings immediately, found 6 (2) the class walks into class I bend over to look downward on the window, see road greenery is shady below education building only, flower blossoms below the set off of the sun the smile that gave beauty.
欣赏了一路的美景，终于看到教学楼了，它像高楼大厦一样，伫立在这。一会儿我便看见了楼梯，我立马上了六楼，找到了六（2）班走进班级我便趴在窗户上往下看，只见教学楼下面路绿树成荫，花儿在太阳的映衬下绽放出了美丽的笑容。
I am staring at a window all the time outside, the beautiful scenery of appreciation, breathing your person to feel comfortable fresh air, the heart thinks campus is really beautiful, the United States must let a person be intoxicated, the United States must let a person cannot dismiss from one's mind, it makes the life more good.
我一直盯着窗外，欣赏的美景，呼吸着令人感到舒服的清新空气，心想校园真美，美得让人陶醉，美得让人无法忘怀，它让生活更加美好。
Author: Li Yuhan
作者：李雨晗
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导师点评：
Write very beautifully, activity is united in wedlock, vivid and dramatic, the literal strength of young writer is very good, depict must be not haunt, walk change scene, the prospect of so much beauty sees inside campus with the step that follows a young writer, can let a person feel the life is good also indeed rise, in ordinary in can capture arrives material, content can be found in observation, consider knowledge place be thought, show in the article reasonably, can drive a reader, reflected the interactive sex of the article and aesthetic perception, it is the one part with very excellent article, echo of from beginning to end, small proposal, can be in when returning a classroom, join the expression of classmates, smile, the depict of spiritual outlook, also write the character's depict the article, such articles will be richer.
写得很美，动静结合，有声有色，小作者的文字功底很好，描写得非常到位，移步换景，跟随着小作者的步伐在校园内看见这么多美丽的景色，着实会让人觉得生活也美好了起来，在平凡中能抓取到素材，在观察中可以找到内容，把所见所闻所思所想，合理地展现在文章中，可以带动读者，体现了文章的互动性和美感，是文章非常出色的一部分，首尾呼应，一点小小的建议，可以在回到教室的时候，加入同学们的神情，微笑，精神面貌的刻画，将人物的刻画也写入文章，这样文章会更丰富。
Directive teacher: Liu Xiejing
指导老师：陆协静