“ life is brief, how could does not have a dream! ” this word is me to what already said oneself, the dream is the index of crossroad, it is the bright lamp on boundless and indistinct sea, how-to my ongoing direction.
“人生短暂，岂能无梦想！”这句话是我对自已说的，梦想是十字路口的指标，是茫茫大海上的明灯，指引我前进的方向。
In the school total meeting has such a few fellow students, all the day downhearted, although the person is in classroom, the heart does not know early where to go to. It is “ body is in the school really, the heart is in the home! ” sees these, I can think of a word in the book, “ person does not have a dream, be like salty fish why! ? I see ” right.
在学校总会有这样的一些同学，整天无精打采的，虽人在教室，心早就不知去什么地方了。真是“身在学校，心在家啊！”看到这些，我会想到书中的一句话，“人无梦想，如咸鱼何！？”我看没错。
But see when me these classmates attend class, when appearance of that pair of deputy dizzy dizzy sleepy; See they do work, when that case of each loaf; See the gym on them, each develops a classroom. I can shake, does “ dream after all for what? I meet ” often ask in reply myself.
但当我看见这些同学上课，那一副副晕晕欲睡的样子时；看到他们做作业，那一个个虚度光阴的情形时；看见他们上体育课，一个个冲出教室。我都会动摇，“梦想到底为了什么？”我会常常反问我自己。
My dream is not quite sturdy in those days, I drift with the tide, follow a heart together with them rambling, be without trouble back at home. When my realize one's errors and mend one's ways during, it seems that everything is late.
那时我的梦想不够坚定，我随波逐流，与他们一同随心散漫，毫无后顾之忧。当我迷途知返之际，似乎一切都晚矣。
Midterm, one flies unexpected calamity, gave me to be hit gravely again. The fellow student of good friend armour that takes in same group just compares me tall very, this makes me very embarrassed. After achievement comes out, classmaster ever had looked for me to talk, he asks: Do you think “ what kind of high school to check? ” after the event, I return a classroom to brew the meaning of call the turn, inner for a long time cannot calm this plants …… inner twist, in that way setback, the dream that lets me is sturdier and sturdier. My dream is just as a small seed, in my heart, it he does not have break ground and go out, but it he grows hard up all the time, I believe eventually one day break ground of its his meeting and go out!
期中考试，一场飞来横祸，给了我又一次重大的打击。坐在同一组中的好朋友甲同学硬是比我高了十分，这让我很难堪。成绩出来之后，班主任曾找过我谈话，他问：“你想考什么样的高中？”事后，我回到教室酝酿言中之意，内心久久不能平静……这种内心的坎坷，那样的挫折，让我的梦想越来越坚定。我的梦想犹如一颗小小的种子，在我心田里，它他并没有破土而出，但它他一直努力地向上生长，我相信终有一天它他会破土而出的！
Had a setback, had put oneself through the mill, had a dream, I just become sturdy piece. Late night, proper all is quiet when, I what embrace a dream, bearing a dream to be chased ahead. Someone can say: “ dream just breaks up theoretic, it is the illusion of childhood period only, which can come true? ” and I think to dream is us however boundless an index on road, want us to had tried hard only, went all out in work, although cannot come true, life also does not have regret.
有了挫折，有了磨练，有了梦想，我才变得坚定张。深夜，正当万籁俱寂之时，拥抱梦想的我，背负着梦想向前追赶。有人会说：“梦想只是一翻空谈，只是童年时期的幻想，哪会实现？”而我认为梦想却是我们漫漫道路上的一个指标，只要我们努力过，拼搏了，即使无法实现，人生也无憾。
I know very well, with me current study is apart from a dream to return very Yao carry. Previously, I had carried Li Bai on the back " near wine " , “ is inherent my material needs useful. ” is affected one sentence to me very big, although my dream has luck of bit of beyond the mark Yao, but had it, I just can try hard; Had it, I just can go all out; Had its …… to have a dream, the sense is really good!
我深知，以我目前的学习距梦想还很遥运。以前，我背过李白的《将近酒》，“天生我材必有用。”一句对我影响很大，我的梦想虽有点过分遥运，但有了它，我才会努力；有了它，我才会去拼；有了它……拥有梦想，感觉真好！
This article " me what appreciation has a dream " young writer passes him description the pursuit to the dream, expression gave the confidence conception that he dreams sturdily to oneself to come true and the courage that make arduous efforts. Article whole content is rich, the language conveys fluent nature. Full text opened a young writer to have appearance to the dream namely, protruding showed dreamy value. Back-to-back move passes contrast, drew up the manner when dreaming, pass a specific event tell about, drew up oneself establish dream and the procedure that go realizing this dream hard. The tail end of the article is divided, chief echo, better pack is whole piece. But the article is put in a problem to do not have very good bring out the theme namely, young writer needs to conceive begin and ending afresh, have bring out the theme appropriately.
这篇文章《欣赏有梦想的我》小作者通过描述自己对于梦想的追求，表达出了自己对于自己坚定梦想成真的信心立意以及努力奋斗的勇气。文章整体内容充实，语言表达流畅自然。全文开篇小作者即对于梦想进行了形容，凸显出了梦想的重要性。紧接着通过对比，写出了没有梦想时的态度，并通过一件具体的事件的讲述，写出了自己树立梦想以及努力去实现这个梦想的过程。文章的结尾部分，首位呼应，较好的收束全篇。但是文章存在一个问题就是没有很好的点题，小作者需要重新构思开头和结尾，并适当进行点题。